Abandonment Party 3: Chapter 12 (First Draft)

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Happy Halloween, to whomever discovers this blog! Did you take a wrong turn on the internet, traveler? Were you looking for some innocent fun? Ha! How unfortunate for you; this sloppy first draft that you have discovered is a nightmare chapter of no repose!

COWER! As two hideous monsters battle each other to the death!

TREMBLE! As awkward exposition doesn’t really explain anything!

PEE YOUR PANTS! When I don’t end the chapter on the one cool line uttered!

THEN CLAW OUT YOUR OWN EYEBALLS as everything drags on with pointless dialog!

Oh, is that not enough to scare you? Well listen to this:

I had a cyst surgically removed last week! FROM MY BUTTOCKS! BWA, HA, HA, HA, HA! Pics after the break. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 3: Chapter 11 (First Draft)

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Hm, I can’t really think of a cool intro. I guess I’ll get right to the chapter and save my commentary for afterward. After all, if I’m going to use up a lot of time I might as well use it thinking about the actual story––not some blog intro. Oh, wait, here’s a picture taken out of context from Tales of Xillia 2; I still have enough time to waste on that!

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Abandonment Party 3: Chapter 10 (First Draft)

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As I get further in this story I’m realizing that I enjoy having more characters around. In the first book I had––what? Nine characters that were the main focus? And Vornis didn’t show up until the end. Back then if I wanted something to happen I had to make it work with just those few.

But now–! Look at this! I have many more characters to use! So many possibilities! Take this chapter for example: I’m having someone familiar show up just to see what happens! And also because I was going to put him in earlier but forgot, ha,ha.

This is why I’ll never understand those stories where half the characters die. Don’t those writers like having options? You can always make a character leave if they aren’t working out. “Put him on a bus” as those trope guys like to say. Or in Tyle’s case he actually came back on a bus.

That reminds me: I really should make a “cast of characters” page or something. Don’t let me forget to do that, Matt. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 3: Chapter 9 (First Draft)

IMG_1170 As the characters in my story split up into groups I have one thing I need to keep in mind: Are they getting along? Now, I don’t mean “are they all happy pals having fun?” What I’m saying is “are their interactions with each other interesting?”

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You said it, Genis from Tales of Symponia! Just because you think Zelos is shallow, rude, and wears a peach vest doesn’t mean he’s bad for the story! A character in the right place can spice up the dialog for everyone. Of course, here in Abandonment Party 3, every character isn’t quite where they need to be yet; I’m still trying out different groupings. Does Jelk work well with Tenny and Darrow? If he does––great! If he doesn’t, well, I’ll erase all his lines in the next draft. I’ll strike him from the story! POW!

Or I’ll just stick him somewhere else. Now is the time for experimentation. Matt, don’t wait for the draft to end! If you think something isn’t working, you’d better tell me now! Should Vornis be with the others? Should Eon take Tenny’s place? Does Pinada need to come back to life and hang out with everyone for no reason!? TELL ME! Continue reading

Abandonment Party 3: Chapter 8 (First Draft)

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I got a copy of Tales of Symphonia Chronicles for my birthday two months ago! I was excited to get this high-definition version for the PS3; my Gamecube with the original one doesn’t work anymore. And since I use the game’s music to inspire my GLORIOUS writings I thought it would be a good idea to play through again for even MORE inspiration!

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Sure, this may LOOK like a schoolyard fight involving a young Mario, Sephiroth, and Sailor Moon, but it’s really quite sophisticated. It’s about the evils of discrimination and the, uh, duality of, like, something really important. Look, I’ll post more pictures when I get to the cool-looking characters, okay!?

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Abandonment Party 3: Chapter 7 (First Draft)

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I talked to my friend Kim a few days ago. She says she’s stuck on writing chapter six of her book. I keep telling her about my “put down any nonsensical idea you think of” method but I don’t think she has the hang of it yet. She says she wants to get it right the first time. Where’s the fun in that? But I can’t bear to see a friend in trouble so I looked online for the best advise about first drafts I could find. Quotes from the finest authors in all of history! Take a look at what I found, Kim:

The first draft of anything is shit.” – Ernest Hemingway

This is the one that came up most. I call my first drafts crappy, but there’s still the glimmer of excellence within. A budding potential! Sorry, Ernest, but you’ve crossed the line this time. And stop swearing on my site!

I don’t write a quick draft and then revise; instead, I work slowly page by page, revising and polishing.” – Dean Koontz

Wow, this guy sounds more your style, Kim. I’ve never read any of his novels, but they’re always next to Stephen King’s at the book store so they must be finished at least!

No passion in the world is equal to the passion to alter someone else’s draft.” – H. G. Wells

Ha,ha, no kidding man! Some guy read your stuff and thought that it needed more Tom Cruise! Kim, hurry up and finish so I can tell you what to change!

I hate first drafts, and it never gets easier. People always wonder what kind of superhero power they’d like to have. I wanted the ability for someone to just open up my brain and take out the entire first draft and lay it down in front of me so I can just focus on the second, third, and fourth drafts.” – Judy Blume

Stop daydreaming about fantastic scenarios and get to writing, you slacker! I want another Fudge sequel!

I don’t fiddle or edit or change while I’m going through that first draft.” – Nora Roberts

Good advice. Now edit your quote so you don’t include three verbs that mean the exact same thing.

Normally I do a first draft using pen and paper, and then do my first edit when I type it onto my computer.” – J. K. Rowling

Oh, brilliant, J.K. I can see why you’re the queen.

That’s all for now, Kim; I’ll look up more quotes later. Ponder these authors’ sagely words and tell me how it goes.

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Abandonment Party 3: Chapter 6 (First Draft)

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Okay! I finally got the first book up on the site. It’s over there on that list to the right on the main page. Now people won’t have to go through the hassle of clicking through the LeanPub site, downloading it, and setting it up on whatever eReader they use. I didn’t anticipate that it would even BE a hassle, but now I realize that everyone may not have the technological know-how to drag a file into iTunes.

So there it is! All eighty-one thousand words in one browser page! You’re welcome and Happy Independence Day! I am blessed to live in a land where people are free to write novels and put them up on their sites for a handful of people to read! Continue reading

Abandonment Party 3: Chapter Five (First Draft)

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In these chapters I’m having several stories progress simultaneously. This is challenging for a few reasons: First of all, events that occur in one story effect the others. I will have to make sure these timelines match up.

Second, I want to make each story progress for a satisfying amount of time before I switch over to a different one. I hate it when the point of view keeps changing so fast that it seems as though nothing of importance is conveyed. Anyone keeping up with One Piece may know what I’m talking about; some chapters seem to do nothing but “check in” with the seven groups of people running around.

Fortunately for Oda, AUTHOR OF ONE PIECE!, he didn’t start doing this until his story had been running for fifteen years. I know the characters, I know the score, and I’m willing to wait it out as the master plan comes together.

I’m the same way when I’m writing; I would not want to pull this kind of stuff in book one. I think switching around between characters before you even know who they are is tedious. I’ve seen some authors do this, though! Can you believe that? There was this one time I started to read a book called A Game of Thrones. Every early chapter was about a different guy! I’d start to get invested in dude number one and then–BOOM! Perspective would switch to someone else. It would leave me hanging before I even had a reason to care about the person being left behind! I couldn’t stand being introduced to new characters only to switch just as things were getting good. I put that book down and went to play Baten Kaitos for the third time instead. Now THAT is a masterpiece of storytelling:

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I can only assume that everyone else who read that Thrones book felt the same way. That poor writer, whatever his name was. Continue reading

X-Men: Days of Future Past and Abandonment Party 3: Chapter 3 (First Draft)

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I was going to talk about how crappy this draft was––but shoot! You can just read it. Instead I want to discuss the ending of the new X-men film. Now, there will be spoilers. And just to make sure you know that there will be spoilers I have constructed a special “spoilers” header to tell you that they’re coming:

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There, isn’t that obnoxious and helpful? Don’t worry; at no point in any fictitious work does Batman chop Vegeta in half with Squall’s gunblade.

Now the ending. It is the ending that so many time travel stories have: one event in the past is changed and the “naughty” future is erased. Hey! That’s great, right? Well, yeah. But the problem is that SO much of what I’ve just experienced never occurred! And in the case of Days of Future Past entire FILMS just got erased! What in the world? I feel cheated! What weight do any of those events and deaths carry if they’re all retconned!?

Wolverine had to KILL Jean Grey in one of the movies. But now she’s alive! That dramatic scene where Wolvy was the only one that could slay his out-of-control dream girl? Pffffft. Gone. Now he gets tied up by Magneto and dumped in a river.

THIS is why I wrote Abandonment Party 2 the way that I did: I wanted a different kind of time travel story. I wanted everything that the reader experienced to matter.

I still enjoyed X Men: Days of Future Past. And despite my complaining, I still nodded and smiled when I saw ol’ Cyclops again. And young Magneto is an amazing villain. Why didn’t they have his theme music from X Men: First Class, though!? I use it in my playlists and I wanted some more variations!! Curses! Curses!

Hear that? When you levitate a frickin’ baseball stadium and slam it into the White House THAT is the music you need to be playing! >:(

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Abandonment Party 2: Epilogue (Second Draft)

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I like evil epilogues. Or “stingers” as I’ve heard them called. I wish more novels would use them; the only evil epilogue I can remember reading is at the end of The Stand by Stephen King.

They pop up in films and video games way more frequently: usually after the credits. It can be as simple as Skeletor’s head bursting out of the water stating “I’ll be back!” Or, in the case of the film The Wolverine, it can be a scene so powerful that it can overshadow the entire story that came before it.

Some people might argue that having a new threat emerge right at the end is in bad taste. I mean the heroes fought hard! Why ruin it? But I believe an evil epilogue compliments the “roller coaster” feeling of being rushed between high and low emotional states. The ending is usually the biggest “high” of the story so the epilogue is the perfect place for one last dive.

But I don’t want to do it just to gut-punch the reader; I want to present relevant story material as well. In the previous book I used the epilogue to set up the sequel by having the villain Pinada appear. It also served to settle the loose end of what happened to Mackaba after the crash. I don’t like to shock people for no reason. Every shock MUST have a purpose.

I hope you enjoy this final scene. Shoot–this is it, isn’t it? Draft two is over.

I’m not sure what I should do next. Should I start the final draft? Should I just go ahead and begin the third story? Let’s have a vote! Sound off in the comments, my thousands of fans! And if I get no votes I’ll just assume you want me to prioritize my completion of all the Disgaea games and Skyrim instead! Continue reading