Music: Parlay’s Burial

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No, not her body’s burial. Although Parlay has had two funeral scenes so you think I’d have music for those, but I don’t. What I’m talking about is her MENTAL burial in chapter 23. The part where she snaps. The moment when she convinces herself that everything she’s done in her life was a waste. Those long years of being kind; being patient while the world rejected her. All that time was for nothing.

By the way, my friend Matt is having his 36th birthday this week! Happy birthday, man! I hope you enjoy this music that I found to embody the rage and pain of a life full of endless frustration!

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Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 23 (Second Draft)

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Only a few minor descriptions were improved in this chapter. Not really worth discussing. So shoot–I guess I’d better talk about the hit manga One Piece, and how it relates to this chapter!

Actually, every Japanese action comic seems to do what this chapter does: They like to remind you that the villain is evil. Here’s what they do: Is the final showdown coming up? Is the hero/heroine on their way there? Well we can’t have that happen without first making sure that all the tragedy has sunk in!

I don’t mind if a story does that–as long as they keep it short. That’s why this chapter is one page; I don’t want to dwell on flashbacks when there’s an ending to get to.

At the same time, this segment is absolutely essential: Not only am I describing a pivotal moment in Parlay’s life, but I’m using the event to link the two books. I’m making it clear that Pinada’s actions influenced Parlay. And she/he goes on to become the “villain” of the first story, continuing the tragic cycle. Now the reader can go to the final confrontation, confident that Pinada needs to be beaten for his heinous acts. (This was also a major theme in the chapter where he killed everyone.)

One more thing: I saw my old pal Jimmy at church today! I told him about these books and this site. Hey Jimmy! If you’re reading this you might want to watch out for spoilers! There are some around here somewhere. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 21 (Second Draft)

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This chapter is filled with hateful dialog, uttered by the antagonist, Pinada. I believe writing such things is helpful to me, though. Yeah, you heard right. See, I get angry at people sometimes. People that have done horrible things. Or maybe they haven’t done anything much at all.

But every time I want to lash out at those people I reign it back. I think: “save it for the books.”

It’s another way for my writing to serve me: I’m able to channel my anger in a positive way, and I’m also able to make a believable villain. I can also observe how evil people are treated through the actions of my characters. It can serve as a reminder to what happens to people that decide to act out on their rage. If I’m in the real world and I ever feel that I’m starting to act like one of these villains, well, I know I need to shut up and walk away or else I’ll get a table dropped on my head. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 22 (First Draft)

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Whenever I hear writers talk about making their stories there’s something that almost all of them mention: They know how it ends and they think about that part all the time. And that’s how I am, too; I’ve thought about these final chapters WAY more than the others.

And I don’t think that’s a bad thing. If I know my ending is amazing then I’ll do whatever it takes to make the journey to reach it worthwhile. It helped me through all those terrible first draft chapters with Templetine. Every time the situation seemed hopeless I knew I could look toward the ending to keep me on track.

I’ve heard some say that they like writing the ending first. I’m not sure I could ever do that. Sure, it is more fun now that I’m hitting the payoffs to all the character’s story lines. But experiencing the lead-up also puts the ending in perspective.

For as much as I THINK I’ve got the ending figured out, there are always those bits that wait until the entire story is written to emerge. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 20 (Second Draft)

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DVD commentaries can be great for learning story-telling techniques. For instance, the other day I was watching the episode of Aeon Flux titled “The Purge.” On the commentary, Peter Chung was talking about how the character Trevor needed to have an incredibly philosophical conversation about the nature of conscience.

Mr. Chung realized that an abstract conversation would feel out of place if it just happened at a normal locale. So what did he do? He decided to have the entire scene play out on a stage with a studio audience!

The dream: to awaken our world.

Shoot–look at that! Now it makes perfect sense for Trevor to make numerous, long-winded remarks: he’s on TV! Even Aeon’s scant attire becomes appropriate!

Like Chung, I have used a similar method in this chapter–heck, I’ve used it in the whole book up until now. When Pinada talks about his plan and what he’s accomplished he does it in front of an audience. It seems natural to the reader that Pinada would speak as long as he had the crowd’s attention.

So what are you waiting for? Grab a cactus-flavored bunny drink and start reading! Everything that happens here is perfectly normal!

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Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 19 (Second Draft)

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My site had a malware warning on it the past week. And do you know why? The WordPress theme I was using was being targeted by hackers! Can you believe that? They must have been using “Weaver II” as a stepping stone to infect my Abandonment Party novels!

Well listen up, you hackers! My work WILL be completed! The world NEEDS a story about a giant clay woman that transforms chairs into knives and by gum–I’m going to give it to them!

(Thanks go to my friend Matt for helping me fix my site. And to Kim: try harder next time, I guess!) Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 20 (First Draft)

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Remember when I said I only had one more terrible chapter left in the book to revise? Guess what! I was wrong. It’s just like that part in Baten Kaitos: Origins where Sagi and his pals battle Wiseman. The group gathers to face him, thinking that they’ve got him beat.
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Then Wiseman surprises them all by holding up the first draft of his novel. The party recoils upon witnessing the raw force of his cheesy plot ideas.

What? It’s not like you’re going to go play the game to prove me wrong. 😉 Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 18 (Second Draft)

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This chapter was satisfying to write. I love it when I have no clue how I’m going to fix the mess I’m stuck with and then BAM–it hits me. Well, it wasn’t quite like that this time. More like sitting in my apartment for two days mulling over possible ideas and having them all slowly congeal into something amazing, but whatever! The garbage of the first draft has been transformed into glittering gems! Now the climax can truly begin.

To ease you into the following, thrill-packed chapters I have enclosed a less-exciting picture of five floating continents firing laser beams at the lair of the Dark Brethren:

I think this happens whenever you beat Tetris.

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