Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 27 (First Draft)

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My friend Matt is watching Catching Fire instead of reading these awesome final chapters! Can you believe that? Hey! Matt! Did you enjoy the film? Did you like seeing the same frickin’ plot twice in a row? Hunger Games: this time with tridents! And clocks! The clock was a pretty cool idea, though. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 26 (Second Draft)

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I thought I’d try something new and put the second draft up before the first one. This is the finale, after all! Why should you have to read the crappy version first? And believe me; the first draft of this chapter is bad. I’ll still put it up, but I didn’t want to diminish your enjoyment as you move from the previous section’s cliff-hanger to this THRILLING CONCLUSION!

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Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 25 (Second Draft)

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In the previous chapters I said that I wanted to change some of Pinada’s dialogue around. I cut out anything that was a petty insult, opting for lines that were more witty or sarcastic. That doesn’t mean that Pinada isn’t capable of stooping that low; it’s just that the time for such stooping hadn’t come yet.

But now it’s time. His case has been shattered. His face has been punched. Things have happened that he didn’t foresee. He’s still dominating this struggle, of course, but that momentary loss of control isn’t something he’s used to.

And it’s always so satisfying to see the smug, arrogant villain removed from his comfort zone–even for a moment. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 24 (Second Draft)

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Look, I’ve been loving this Lady Knight book over at Mark Reads. But I had a bit of a disappointing experience last week: I got to the last chapter and there WASN’T a climactic battle with the main villain. Can you believe that? Sure, there was a thrilling castle infiltration scene and an excellent fight with the warrior bodyguard–but when it came time to finish the head honcho himself? Done in two pages with little effort!

I’m not upset though; this is one of the reasons I wanted to write stories of my own. I realize that authors won’t always do what I want them to do. They’ll spend hundreds of pages hyping up a character. Then when he finally appears they’ll have him say a handful of lines before getting cut down in one stroke. I’ve come to accept it. They do things their way; I do things my way.

And what is my way? An epic struggle against the antagonist for seven straight chapters! YEAH–HA HA!

And if you don’t like it you can write your OWN story where the bad guy makes himself invisible and stands on a table. 😉 Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 25 (First Draft)

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 Matt, I almost don’t want you to read the first drafts for these final chapters. It isn’t because they’re more horrible than the others. It’s just that I hate to see the ending incomplete like this! It’s flawed. I don’t want you to get to these cool parts and think “Wow, this would be amazing if the writing didn’t suck.”

It would be like watching the end of Terminator 2, only to see Arnold get dropped into a bowl of pudding. Then Sarah Conner fist-bumps John while the T-1000 explodes from the power of robot tears.

Oh, sorry, that ending would still rock. I know I was going for a “worse ending” there to use as an example, but I just can’t seem to describe one that would be disappointing. I’ll try harder next time Matt–go ahead and read the chapter. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 3 (First Draft)

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Welcome to another terrible first draft! It’s all here today: lack of description! Out of character moments! Grammatical horrors! And the B.S. method that I named after myself makes a thrilling return!

But man, I am seeing the potential. Once I’m done revising this book it’s gonna be sweet. So let’s get started! I’m gonna make this the best chapter about time-traveling and forgetting your wallet EVER! Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 2 (Second Draft)

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Lots of tiny changes this time, along with the addition of Mean’s stop by the hotel where she lives. I never really explained why she lived at a hotel in the first story; she just kinda ran off there after chapter nine. But there’s a reason for waiting until now to tell you: I believe that information should always come at its proper time. A revelation–no matter how tiny–can change everything you feel about a character. Everything. Continue reading