Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 22 (First Draft)

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Whenever I hear writers talk about making their stories there’s something that almost all of them mention: They know how it ends and they think about that part all the time. And that’s how I am, too; I’ve thought about these final chapters WAY more than the others.

And I don’t think that’s a bad thing. If I know my ending is amazing then I’ll do whatever it takes to make the journey to reach it worthwhile. It helped me through all those terrible first draft chapters with Templetine. Every time the situation seemed hopeless I knew I could look toward the ending to keep me on track.

I’ve heard some say that they like writing the ending first. I’m not sure I could ever do that. Sure, it is more fun now that I’m hitting the payoffs to all the character’s story lines. But experiencing the lead-up also puts the ending in perspective.

For as much as I THINK I’ve got the ending figured out, there are always those bits that wait until the entire story is written to emerge. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 20 (Second Draft)

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DVD commentaries can be great for learning story-telling techniques. For instance, the other day I was watching the episode of Aeon Flux titled “The Purge.” On the commentary, Peter Chung was talking about how the character Trevor needed to have an incredibly philosophical conversation about the nature of conscience.

Mr. Chung realized that an abstract conversation would feel out of place if it just happened at a normal locale. So what did he do? He decided to have the entire scene play out on a stage with a studio audience!

The dream: to awaken our world.

Shoot–look at that! Now it makes perfect sense for Trevor to make numerous, long-winded remarks: he’s on TV! Even Aeon’s scant attire becomes appropriate!

Like Chung, I have used a similar method in this chapter–heck, I’ve used it in the whole book up until now. When Pinada talks about his plan and what he’s accomplished he does it in front of an audience. It seems natural to the reader that Pinada would speak as long as he had the crowd’s attention.

So what are you waiting for? Grab a cactus-flavored bunny drink and start reading! Everything that happens here is perfectly normal!

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Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 19 (Second Draft)

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My site had a malware warning on it the past week. And do you know why? The WordPress theme I was using was being targeted by hackers! Can you believe that? They must have been using “Weaver II” as a stepping stone to infect my Abandonment Party novels!

Well listen up, you hackers! My work WILL be completed! The world NEEDS a story about a giant clay woman that transforms chairs into knives and by gum–I’m going to give it to them!

(Thanks go to my friend Matt for helping me fix my site. And to Kim: try harder next time, I guess!) Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 18 (Second Draft)

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This chapter was satisfying to write. I love it when I have no clue how I’m going to fix the mess I’m stuck with and then BAM–it hits me. Well, it wasn’t quite like that this time. More like sitting in my apartment for two days mulling over possible ideas and having them all slowly congeal into something amazing, but whatever! The garbage of the first draft has been transformed into glittering gems! Now the climax can truly begin.

To ease you into the following, thrill-packed chapters I have enclosed a less-exciting picture of five floating continents firing laser beams at the lair of the Dark Brethren:

I think this happens whenever you beat Tetris.

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Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 19 (First Draft)

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Oh wow. Once again I am stunned at how much work needs to be done to clean up a chapter. This sucker needs to be razed with a purifying flame and swept from the earth. I think there’s like ONE joke that I want to keep.

I mean this is the FINAL match and I did nothing to capture any feeling of excitement. No air of tension–it’s all ruined by characters making pointless asides. And then all the worst ideas I’ve ever had decide to show up in one place and have a parade. Just–ugh–read it yourself. If you must. This is for learning, remember. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 17 (Second Draft)

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I got two more downloads on the first Abandonment Party today! That brings the total readers up to twelve. Oh baby, you know what that means: PRICE HIKE!

Let’s see; I have some complex calculations to make. There are millions of people that can read English, right? Then I factor in my book’s supply–being digital it is almost limitless. So, with a rate of demand at two per month, I project that in ten years my novel must be sold at a price of one cent.

Economics, you cruel overlord!

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Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 14 (Second Draft)

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A rousing holiday! A death in the family. Cousins, long-lost! Does any of that happen in this chapter? Of course it doesn’t. This stuff happened to me last week.

The death was my grandpa, Albert Smith. I won’t talk about it much here, but there’s something that I notice people thinking at funerals: “I wish I had more time to spend with him before he died.” I think it’s a natural thought. I don’t think it’s thought to dwell on, however. After all, when you love someone do you ever really stop to say “I’ve spent enough time with this person! They can die now.”

I know I don’t think that. Even if you sit down with the soon-to-be deceased and discussed everything on your mind you’d still be craving more when they’re gone. Now, does this have anything to do with my chapter, here? Hm, maybe it does. Then again, it could just be about two women smacking each other around and sitting in chairs. Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 13 (Second Draft)

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I’m just going to outright say that I’m pleased with how Trisk’s conversation with Tenny turned out in this draft. It’s a romantic scene. And if I’m an authority on anything–it would be on romances that are troubled, awkward, unrealistic, or flat-out doomed.

You see, although I am single I have experienced the quiet talks in the dark that frequently occur before a relationship begins. It’s one of the most memorable times, I think. And no matter how things end up with the other person, it is something I never forget.

Because it can be the start of something dream-like and wonderful. It can also be the death of your lofty expectations.

Have fun guessing what’s going to happen to these two! 😉 Continue reading

Abandonment Party 2: Chapter 12 (Second Draft)

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Tornados! Birthdays! Friends that need moved into new houses! Those things happen, and they DEMAND my time. Will I let that stop me from writing my chapters!? NO! NEVER!

But will they stop me from coming up with an elaborate intro for this post? Ha! Of course they will.

So just go back one post to the first draft of chapter 13. Read the speech I put there, pause to wipe a tear as it moves you, and then come back to this. Continue reading